By Joyce Jacobo
[Author’s Note: An experimental poem that I wrote quite a bit ago, and which eventually got expanded into a whole interactive tale called, “The Castle of Countless Compositions,” posted on DeviantArt. It’s fun how certain ideas develop in unexpected ways.]
I needed a caretaker for an old castle
long abandoned then claimed by vines
where few dared to venture—
aside from certain protagonists all set
to explore its labyrinthine corridors
and discover its untold secrets
The perfect character…
…I paced and thought
paced and thought
paused and groaned
because nothing sprang to mind
I decided to take a break at noon
for a peanut butter and jelly sandwich
and padded down the hallway
to my kitchen…
…when a Formless, Discreet Idea
began to follow me
quietly
and patiently
Patience…
An important trait
for a caretaker to have
The Formless, Discreet Idea
maintained a polite distance behind me
its footfalls so light on the carpet
I barely heard a sound
. . .Perhaps they would be just as light
across wooden or stone floors
. . . and I imagined a calm whispery voice say,
“You always eat at this hour.
You must eat at this hour,
or your schedule will fall apart.
Routine is crucial.”
. . . which was when the Formless, Discreet Idea
turned into a Formless, Methodical Idea
I offered my composed guest a sandwich
but it declined on the grounds that it had never needed to eat before
. . . something that seemed right for a caretaker devoted
to an otherwise abandoned old castle
deep in willowy woods
. . .almost like a spirit
haunted by memories
who grew irritated and flickered bright red
when I dropped a bit of grape jelly
onto the countertop
then brushed me aside to wipe it up
with a moistened paper towel
A Methodical, Spirit of Cleanliness Idea who
as she wiped at the spot (and then moved onto the entire surface)
developed the vague semblance of a woman
the texture and hue of a fog at dusk
her misty hair tied up into a tight bun at the back of her head
although two strands had escaped and drifted (as if through water)
on either side of her face
Her eyes were two points of golden light in darkness
and she wore an apron around a dress
that disappeared into a light cloud of steam
at the very bottom
. . .and a character now drifted before me
She straightened and offered a curtsy
“How do you do?” her voice was like an echoing well
“Please call me Lucia Brume.”
Brilliantly crafted, dear Joyce. Love it.💕
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Thank you so much, Grace. It means a lot to hear that from you. ^_^
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My pleasure 💕
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Yay!
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Ohh my! That was fantastic!
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Awww, thank you so much! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
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I really did
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Awwwwwwww. ^_^
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Fun, dark imagery!
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Thank you so much!!! Some characters just appear bit by bit like that. ^_^
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What fun and beautifully thought out. Your unique idea really worked!!
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Awww, thanks, Karima! I’m thrilled it worked out so well!
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How intriguing Joyce.
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Thank you so much, Sadje. It was fun to write. ^_^
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You’re most welcome
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